prose writes
And... a poem... or something. I'm not sure.
HYPOGLYCEMIC NIGHTS
Then, every now and again—even if I listen—I wake unable to find the opening from where I hear Mother’s voice. Sheets wrapped tangly about my head, thighs sticky with sweat, and arms shaking from within Dad’s old, torn sleeves—my new sleep shirt. Mother—or a friend’s mom, on sleepover nights—offers peanut-buttered crackers and milk when I get my head free enough to see. Not minding the crumbs in bed, not worrying if my teeth stay un-brushed until morning smells my dead-insect breath, Mother makes creases beside me until nothing’s dizzy anymore. Until, Okay.

9 Comments:
I think you did an excellent job of conveying the mood of one of those nights... This is an eloquent piece of writing! I especially love "not worrying if my teeth stay un-brushed until morning smells my dead-insect breath".
This whole piece gives off a very visual vibe.
Peace,
Taiko-ma
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Anonymous, At
11:37 PM
"one of those nights" hmmm
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Anonymous, At
9:03 PM
oh, that comment was me
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Anonymous, At
9:03 PM
the "hmmm" comment isn't clear to me.
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B-Go, At
10:40 PM
"one of those nights" wasn't clear to me - how taiko-ma read those nights - so I wrote, "hmmm." That's all.
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Anonymous, At
11:28 PM
"hypoglycemic nights" was my guess.
i know, i spend too much time procrastinating.
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B-Go, At
11:43 PM
Yup. I meant "one of those hypoglycemic nights".
Any "hmmm" caused by aforementioned statement is hereby disavowed, disclaimed, discombobulated, and possibly disembarked. ;)
Peace,
Taiko-ma
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Anonymous, At
9:20 AM
taiko-ma, are you hypoglycemic?
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Anonymous, At
4:22 PM
No, I'm not. To clarify my comments: I think B-Go wrote this so well that anyone who read this would get a glimpse of how it feels to have a hypoglycemic episode.
When I read Ray Bradbury, for example, to me his words just TASTE good. That may sound funny, but its just the feeling of a rich wholeness in the work.
This is that. Good stuff.
Peace,
Taiko-ma
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Anonymous, At
9:13 PM
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