I'm not going to delete all the spaces in here, because there was a pattern for the poem. A correct form that will probably not even come out right on here, but it's worth trying. (Now that I've checked, I know it didn't come out quite right. Close enough though, I guess.) Just a working title as of yet. I almost contradicted myself by not giving it a title... It's just that I don't even know how worth-while one would be for this here poem. How's that fer yer hillbilly talk? Be well, y'all.
evidence
some of them, man-
kind, born eunuchs;
some made so by men; and still others—
chosen, choose it— but I still haven’t
found what
I’m looking for. some lines,
haunting that way; some
themes—recur and please;
some words forgotten,
come back
and I look at myself:
aged. broken
teeth; chipping bones,
—not done yet. remember, I’m
. here. where I am,
that’s someplace, too.
the pencil I’ve carried
around so long—it’s so dulled down,
my beavered tree.
but, that’s its use—not
just pocketed lead.
making it up, I make room.

4 Comments:
great. i'd like to see the original spacing.
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Anonymous, At
1:31 AM
i really like it. the beaver tree part created a funny picture in my mind. and i liked the space part the best (end). it's creative and we do make space...liked this. that u2 line whenever i hear that song, my heart hurts with longing.
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strunny, At
8:19 PM
I like your poem... it makes me miss you a lot, though. :-/
Is this my very first commenting on your blog?
I LOVE YOU!
-kv.
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Anonymous, At
9:44 PM
i like it too. the light is beginning to dawn and your poetry is like a flower blooming for me ( I just read Ps. 19 so I'm in a poetic frame of mind too), each time I read what you write there is more fullness and more beauty.
is the first part in reference to the Buddist monks you see in lots of places there?
I like the references to the process of life, of writing (at least that is how I interepret some of the ,ines.
thanks B for helping me look at poetry anew.sag
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Anonymous, At
9:46 AM
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