DREAMS poem
I keep writing poems... when all I really ought to be doing is reading novels and essays for school...
DREAMS OF YOU
I.
Us at dusk: I hand you an axe.
You slam it through
the sinews of my neck
till my head falls straight
into my left arm.
As you fling the axe away, we walk
out of the woods hand in hand,
head in hand.
I blink and speak,
though my shirt sops red.
At school, I stand at the chalkboard writing
with my right hand, which is always wrong:
WORNG WORNG WORNG
No matter. You tell me
I'll never spell wrong right.
In my kitchen, I take
a fork from the drainer.
You reach in the fridge
and get some milk. “Go on,”
you say. I point toward my wrist—
fight the urge to force the fork through.
Someone pounds on the front door.
Back in the woods, I drop
my head in the leaves. As
someone approaches—you
hide. He picks my head
up, sees into the eyes,
and sets that crown back on my neck.
Blood still drips, but it fits.
It doesn’t
fall.
These "dreams" aren't really dreams I've ever had--except, perhaps, daydreams... I've been trying to combat the lies that keep coming into my thoughts and I decided that, if I could write about/imagine someone else battling these things and realizing the truth and strength outside of his/her own power, I might know the truth better myself...

7 Comments:
You have some pretty powerful daydreams...
This poem really startled me at several points. I actually found the "hand in hand, head in hand" line funny--maybe as relief because of the imagery it follows. Can you explain some of the symbols here? In particular, I'm wondering who it is that crowns you. Might this relate to the strength "outside you"?
Good, good stuff.
Peace,
Taiko-ma
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Anonymous, At
11:37 PM
i imagined you & the person you're stuck with (for now) when you mentioned the fork and wrist thing.
By
strunny, At
3:33 PM
Are you left handed?
By
Megumi, At
11:29 AM
yeah, i am...
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B-Go, At
9:01 PM
oh, and for the questions about symbols... well, I'm not sure everything in here is symbolic per se, but there are things that i found meaningful. the left hand, for one thing, is the sinister hand or something... I oughta look that up and know how to explain it for sure.
the "crown," may perhaps be read as the "crown [of one's head]"... the top of one's head / not a literal crown... but, so what if it actually is a literal crown? as for the person doing the crowning--who knows how the world would read it, but if I'm the speaker and I need someone to show me the truth and get the liar out of the way, that person has got to be Jesus. no question.
sorry for the haste of these answers... i think i'm in a... mood? and if you didn't get any sense of that, i'm glad for it.
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B-Go, At
9:10 PM
I keep coming back to this one, until you post again :) and it is less disturbing now. It occurred to me that because of testing your blood sugar so often that the image of blood dripping is fairly common to your life where-as it is not normal for me.
Also I read these words in Ps. 18 and related them to what this poem says to me.
"The cords of death entangled me ; the torrents of destruction overwhelmed me. The cords of the grave coiled around me; the snares of death confronted me. In my distress I called to the Lord;...He heard me... He rescued me..."vs 4,5 ,6, and 17 a
By
Anonymous, At
9:06 AM
B-Go;
Have a happy Thanksgiving. Peace be with you.
Taiko-ma
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Anonymous, At
9:19 AM
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